Here's my scheme for the iceberg. My monument stair is eroding thru the iceberg. I have also added some pictures of built projects that are precedence.
- the "iceberg" them comes through well in the precedents, but it is not quite clear in your axon: the windows and doors read like they are embedded in a solid volume not in a transparent one.
- the erosion of the stair is not productive: use the massing to strengthen your topic not to weaken it!
- think about broadening the base of the stair to avoid the triangles in the side elevations and the residual spaces that they create and make for a more generous gesture. The stair might continue into the building?
- The view you selected works nice: next time around draw more rigorously in a less cartoonish style.
Frances, Adding some more color to the drawing will help it read more clearly. The examples you provide for your iceberg concept are good. Maybe you want to add some text to describer further what you taking from these projects into your design. Keep it going!
I agree with Enno in that the "iceberg" is not coming through as well in your axon view and that could be mostly because of the view point you're at. The birds-eye view tends to flatten everything out. I looked back at your sections again and what I like most about them was the angled horizontal planes that jut out and back in. Are they still in your design? If so, these features are not showing or reading as clearly in your axon view and I think that might be one of the strongest features for you to enhance and show off. I would try studying a perspective view from street level; if someone was standing on the sidewalk in front of our site or across the street from it, what would they see? This would also really help give your water stairs a sense of scale and proportion.
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Frances,
Three brief comments:
- the "iceberg" them comes through well in the precedents, but it is not quite clear in your axon: the windows and doors read like they are embedded in a solid volume not in a transparent one.
- the erosion of the stair is not productive: use the massing to strengthen your topic not to weaken it!
- think about broadening the base of the stair to avoid the triangles in the side elevations and the residual spaces that they create and make for a more generous gesture. The stair might continue into the building?
- The view you selected works nice: next time around draw more rigorously in a less cartoonish style.
Talk to you soon,
Enno
Frances,
Adding some more color to the drawing will help it read more clearly. The examples you provide for your iceberg concept are good. Maybe you want to add some text to describer further what you taking from these projects into your design.
Keep it going!
Hi Frances!
I agree with Enno in that the "iceberg" is not coming through as well in your axon view and that could be mostly because of the view point you're at. The birds-eye view tends to flatten everything out. I looked back at your sections again and what I like most about them was the angled horizontal planes that jut out and back in. Are they still in your design? If so, these features are not showing or reading as clearly in your axon view and I think that might be one of the strongest features for you to enhance and show off. I would try studying a perspective view from street level; if someone was standing on the sidewalk in front of our site or across the street from it, what would they see? This would also really help give your water stairs a sense of scale and proportion.
Keep plugging away!
Kate
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