Hi Frances! I'm glad to see that your scanner is up and running! I have that problem with mine as well from time to time! Technology - go figure!
I was just looking at your plans and had one question for you - I noticed that you have an "open to below" section on the second floor near the cafe/kitchen. What exactly would you be looking down into? Is it a green space of some kind?
Your stair plan looks interesting - I am looking forward to seeing the elevation of how you develop this and incorporate "ice/water" into the design!
Here is some initial feedback for you after studying your plans:
I think on your programming of the spaces you might have a bit of a scale issue. For instance the toilet looks to be the same size nearly as the back of house on the retail. You might want to study the sizes of that a bit closer to tighter up your program.
Is that an "open to below" space where the "X" is on the patio/office side, or an elevator? It creates a dead zone on the first floor, just to the right of your toilets, and I'm curious what you have in mind for that space?
Finally, you have set up a pretty strong statement with the angling of the stair and water feature (can't wait to see the sections develop on this element), however there seems to be no real "payoff" at the top of the stairs. I wonder if perhaps your upper patio should relate to the angled statement you have made with the stairs.
Also, Michelle makes a good point above. The open to below space is an important one, but maybe reconsider what is adjacent to it, to make it more special.
For your final presentation, I would only include "plans you didn't like" on your boards, if you can clearly indicate what was gained from that study, or how it helped evolve your current scheme. Otherwise, in my opinion, they become distractions and space fillers.
Michelle & Eric- The "open to below" space is a double height area for those on the patio from the Pru to look in and see the activity going on inside. I will look at a green space there, that's something I hadn't thought of.
Frances, the office space next to the patio seems out of place. Do you really want an office space in your program? Is there another type of space that would better suit your design? The same with the toilet spaces, they look huge. Looking at the building as an iceberg is very interesting. This approach fits well into your scheme.
It's nice that you included the progress sketches - use some of those in the "research and development" section for the finals!
The key feature of your approach is the spine of water flanked by the patio spaces. That will be the focus of your design. I agree with Nick, that the office space is residual and too small anyway.
The green areas to the side on the upper levels: are those spaces as they exist, or do you plan on enriching them in some way? (which is what I hope you will do). I think these areas as well as the green stuff on the lower level need some focus in terms of use and intended aesthetics.
After you are done with the sections, be more rigorous with the drawing to get a better grasp of scale and how the interiors lay out. The comments on the nature of the double height space are well taken.
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Hi Frances!
I'm glad to see that your scanner is up and running! I have that problem with mine as well from time to time! Technology - go figure!
I was just looking at your plans and had one question for you - I noticed that you have an "open to below" section on the second floor near the cafe/kitchen. What exactly would you be looking down into? Is it a green space of some kind?
Your stair plan looks interesting - I am looking forward to seeing the elevation of how you develop this and incorporate "ice/water" into the design!
Good luck!
Frances -
Here is some initial feedback for you after studying your plans:
I think on your programming of the spaces you might have a bit of a scale issue. For instance the toilet looks to be the same size nearly as the back of house on the retail. You might want to study the sizes of that a bit closer to tighter up your program.
Is that an "open to below" space where the "X" is on the patio/office side, or an elevator? It creates a dead zone on the first floor, just to the right of your toilets, and I'm curious what you have in mind for that space?
Finally, you have set up a pretty strong statement with the angling of the stair and water feature (can't wait to see the sections develop on this element), however there seems to be no real "payoff" at the top of the stairs. I wonder if perhaps your upper patio should relate to the angled statement you have made with the stairs.
Also, Michelle makes a good point above. The open to below space is an important one, but maybe reconsider what is adjacent to it, to make it more special.
Hope that helps.
One more thing:
For your final presentation, I would only include "plans you didn't like" on your boards, if you can clearly indicate what was gained from that study, or how it helped evolve your current scheme. Otherwise, in my opinion, they become distractions and space fillers.
Michelle & Eric-
The "open to below" space is a double height area for those on the patio from the Pru to look in and see the activity going on inside. I will look at a green space there, that's something I hadn't thought of.
Thanks for the feedback.
Frances,
the office space next to the patio seems out of place. Do you really want an office space in your program? Is there another type of space that would better suit your design? The same with the toilet spaces, they look huge.
Looking at the building as an iceberg is very interesting. This approach fits well into your scheme.
Frances,
It's nice that you included the progress sketches - use some of those in the "research and development" section for the finals!
The key feature of your approach is the spine of water flanked by the patio spaces. That will be the focus of your design. I agree with Nick, that the office space is residual and too small anyway.
The green areas to the side on the upper levels: are those spaces as they exist, or do you plan on enriching them in some way? (which is what I hope you will do). I think these areas as well as the green stuff on the lower level need some focus in terms of use and intended aesthetics.
After you are done with the sections, be more rigorous with the drawing to get a better grasp of scale and how the interiors lay out. The comments on the nature of the double height space are well taken.
Enno
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